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Offline Elsza

Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
« on: September 17, 2011, 05:18:29 PM »
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  • 2352 AD. Kit's world is the compound, her father and Jemimia, because it is unsafe to go outside. Untill everything she loves is threatend and she begins to learnt that freedom carries a cost...

     

    Offline Chinaren

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #121 on: February 22, 2012, 07:03:53 AM »
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  • Nice one!  Sorry it's taken so long to catch up, busy busy busy!

    Anyway, the cellmate has to be Mr. Depressing Pessimist.  He's so down about everything, but he does know a guard who may be open to bribes of a... personal sort. 
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    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #122 on: February 22, 2012, 02:54:38 PM »
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  • Mr Depressing pessimist? Thats an aptonym if I ever saw one!! :P

    And as for 
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      I hope your not implying what I think you implying Mr. Chinaren!!  :nono:

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    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #123 on: February 22, 2012, 08:32:49 PM »
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  • Quote from: Elsza link=topic=2695.msg33925#msg33925 date=1329922478
    I hope your not implying what I think you implying Mr. Chinaren!!  :nono:

    ...have you met Chinaren?

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    Offline Chinaren

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #124 on: February 22, 2012, 10:55:54 PM »
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  • It's what makes the world turn, and the guard's probably fed up of robot nookie.  :s
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    Offline Elsza

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #125 on: February 23, 2012, 04:03:18 PM »
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  • Any other suggestions ?? :taptaptap:

    Keep it clean people!!

    Offline ViP Perry Tratchett

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #126 on: February 25, 2012, 01:25:28 PM »
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  • It's not going to be easy to get out of here without help, but maybe our 'eyes' could be the answer.

    Perhaps it's a renegade robot, thrown in to the cell eons ago and forgotten about.  It can dig down to the old sewers below if someone could only unlock it's arms and boot up its secondary drive...
    Read my Discworld Fanfic!

    Offline Elsza

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #127 on: February 25, 2012, 08:17:39 PM »
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  • Nice one Perry! I could combine the two!  :-) A Pessimistic robot...

    Offline Chinaren

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #128 on: February 26, 2012, 12:38:10 AM »
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  • Quote from: Elsza link=topic=2695.msg33960#msg33960 date=1330201059
    Nice one Perry! I could combine the two!  :-) A Pessimistic robot...

    As long as it's not called Marvin.
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    Offline Elsza

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #129 on: February 26, 2012, 03:50:12 PM »
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  • Don't worry China, I wont steal from hitchikers!!

    Offline Elsza

    Re: Chapter 14- Roderick the Robot
    « Reply #130 on: March 01, 2012, 03:46:24 PM »
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  • Chapter Fourteen- Rodrick the Robot

    Kit’s face paled, as  she leapt in front of her Father, ready to defend him from the Bot crouching in the corner of their prison.

    Every single cell in her body ached to fly across the room and press herself into the wall, as far as physically possible away from the creature she had learnt to fear. But her Father was so weak... she didn’t want to risk moving him, so she was forced to stand her ground.

    “Oh, and I suppose you’re going to start panicking now, just because I’m a robot” it said, it’s voice low and sad (reminding Kit of the voice her Father used for the character of Eeyore, when he read Winnie the Pooh to Kit, before she learnt to read for herself), “Honestly its prejudice! I bet you believe all the stereotypes! I bet you think I’m on their side!” it moaned.

    “Well aren’t you on their side?” Kit demanded confusedly.

    “I wouldn’t be in this Cell idiot child! I didn’t ask for this, but I was programmed as a renegade. I never had a choice. Could of had a nice comfy job, working for the Principals, but once I was programmed to think, they wouldn’t take me! I had to rebel and they’re still punishing me! It’s not fair...” It paused it’s self-absorbed rant to glance at Kit, who was still crouched defensively in front of her Father, “Are you deaf? I said I’m a rebel, you must now I won’t hurt you!”

    “The last group of rebels I met, tried to kill me” Kit replied, deadpan.

    “I couldn’t attack even if I wanted to, look!” The robot exclaimed, shifting slightly to reveal the coils of thick chains, binding him tightly to the wall. “Star Metal, not even the strongest Robot can break it!” He explained bitterly, “It’s against my rights keeping me chained here...” he became incomprehensible as he began to cry nosily.

    Kit sighed and began tearing strips off her clothing to bandage her father’s wounds, doing her best to tend to him and ignore the robots increasingly loud wailing.

    *
    Shaun’s face looked less pained, and his sleep was growing more peaceful as he breathing eased much to Kit’s relief. A twitchy guard, had shoved a tray of food and water into the cell, so she now had something to cool her father’s fevered brow and moisten his cracked lips. She saved the food, until he awoke, taking none for herself.

    Once her father was stable, Kit began again to take notice of the robot, still sobbing noisily in his corner. Her mind flashbacked to how Tarquin had used a deactivated Robot to get them out of the van and she began to realise that even a robot was better than no ally at all.

    “Hey, it’s okay... um... what’s your name?”

    “Roderick” the robot sniffled.

    “It’s okay Roderick, stop crying, if we help each other maybe we can escape.” Kit reasoned cheerfully.

    “No we can’t” Roderick replied flatly, “I’ve been here for ten years and seen human’s come and go, but I’ve always remained. The take you human’s out and execute you, when they grow bored, but the wont decommission me, oh no, I won’t die of natural causes, I’ll just remain here for eternity. You should be grateful that you get to die!”

    Kit blanched at the thought of execution, but refused to dwell on it, instead replying swiftly,

    “Actually, Roderick, I was thinking of a less painful way to escape than... um... death”

    “Ha escape! Don’t get me started! Even if I miraculously break these chains, I’ll have to get down the corridor without the guards seeing me, and even then, I’ll have to get into the ventilation shaft without making noise, and even then...”

    With a hidden smile, Kit made careful mental notes, as he told her how not to escape.

    *
    The human troops outside the castle were highly disciplined, remaining on guard, in formation and almost completely still for the three hours they had been waiting for Kit, only occasionally indulging in aggressive stares at the robots impassively guarding the castle gates.

    Tarquin was ruining this professional impression, by twitching, pacing and cursing, constantly looking at his watch, and shaking like a nervous greyhound before a race.

    For the umpteenth time, Trixie firmly gripped Tarquin’s arm, hissing,

    “Stand still, will you!”

    “It’s been three hours and twenty four minutes Trixie!” he replied, his eyes wild and panicked, “They could be doing anything in their...”

    “You have to learn to trust Kit, Tarkie! She isn’t as sweet and helpless as she looks”

    “I can’t take it, I’m going in after her!” He hissed,

    “Think for a second idiot boy! If you go in there now, fighting will break out, and we’re not likely to win! It doesn’t matter what happens to Kit, if everyone else dies!”

    “But it does, Trix” he moaned anguished

    “You really love her don’t you?” she asked curiously, blinking at him.

    “Trixie, time and place!”

    “... but you have to be clear headed about this!”

    “Neil” Tarquin replied quietly.

    Trixie glared at him and balled her fists. They didn’t talk about Trixie’s boyfriend Neil, who’d been killed on a mission seven months earlier, ever. Because she’d rather be damned than cry.

    “If it was Neil in there, wouldn’t you go after him?”

    Hissing with fury, Trixie grabbed her friends ear and pulled it painfully close to her mouth.

    “Okay, Idiot, you can do it, but you will listen to me and you will do it properly! I’m not losing anyone today”


    Sp- So what’s Trixie’s plan for getting into the castle without a fight (or at least losing a fight) ? Negotiation, force or suberterfuge?  Just Tarquin, Tarquin and Trixie, a small team or the whole group? How, when, what, where?

    Offline ViP Perry Tratchett

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #131 on: March 04, 2012, 01:18:04 AM »
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  • Very nice.  Do like this robot fellow!

    Slight type somewhere:

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    know.

    For the suggestion.  She has to have a spare, reprogrammed, robot somewhere, stashed away for emergencies.  Maybe she can use that to infiltrate the base, start blowing things up inside and cause a distraction.

    Read my Discworld Fanfic!

    Offline Chinaren

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #132 on: March 04, 2012, 10:11:19 AM »
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  • Missed this before somehow.

    I'm currently not well, and it's imparing my creativity.  Mmm. A secret tunnel the resistance has been working on for many years? 

    It's a bit weak I know.  Stupid cold.  >(
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    Offline john-elizabeth

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #133 on: March 04, 2012, 05:33:52 PM »
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  •  Love it  :clap: One question Can Kit be an idiot child ? Is her middle name Judith ? I think Tarkie & Trixie should go together, they work well. Trixie could have a plan of the castle, could show secret tunnels ! This could be why she said lets do it properly.  :woot:

    Offline Elsza

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #134 on: March 04, 2012, 09:44:59 PM »
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  • Thankyou China, Perry! :) Father... what exactly have you against Kit?? *Raises Eyebrow* :P

    Offline Elsza

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #135 on: March 05, 2012, 06:34:49 PM »
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  • Oh, trixie calls Taruin Idiot child! I get it now!  :D

    Offline Elsza

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #136 on: April 10, 2012, 08:49:48 PM »
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  • Sorry haven't posted promise more after the hols!

    Offline Chinaren

    Re: Under Lock and Key (Working Title)
    « Reply #137 on: April 11, 2012, 07:29:56 AM »
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  • Quote from: Elsza link=topic=2695.msg34285#msg34285 date=1334087388
    Sorry haven't posted promise more after the hols!

    I agree.

     :res2:

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