The Adolescent Angels' House of Luxury: Candy's Story

[Saint]

Would you give up your dignity?

In a world similar to our own geographically, but vastly different morally, Candy, a 14 year old girl, knows nothing but prostitution.  Candy is treated like dirt, and fucked over by everyone she meets (Often literally).  As a new millenium draws in though, and people (though very few people) start to see sense, Candy's life is to be thrown on it's head when a group of revolutionaries break into the 'Adolescent Angels' House of Luxury' pre-brothel she's working at.  New clothes, new outlook, and a new life await her, but even given a decent purpose in life, Candy can't help but fall back on what it is she's good at.

Prologue - Crumble
Chapter 1 - Uri Carter [Part 1]
Chapter 1 - Uri Carter [Part 2]

[Saint]

[Temporarily Removed]

[Saint]

Apologies for the immense delay with this, I've been swamped with other projects.  It's finally here though, so read up.

This chapter contains no sexual acts, but the next will, I promise.  I'm not yet decided on which girl to give a job to, so pick an age (Disclaimer: Despite addition of a poll, this is not an SP, just something to let me know what you guys want).

[Burningplain]

I say 18, for once give us some one above the age of consent please!

[Saint]

You're allowed two more votes, Beep. ('cause with nine option and only about four people will probably vote, I'll have a bunch of options with one vote otherwise)  And the whole point of this story is that they're underage, because there is no age limit in that universe.

[Chinaren]

I voted!  Maybe the next girl could be a noobe.  Her first time.  (Which has been auctioned to the highest bidder).

Have you ever seen, er, Pretty Angel (I think it was called that, can't remember for sure).  It had a very young Brooke Shields in, if you know her.  In the film she is a young girl growing up in a whorehouse, and they auctioned her off when she was about 12.  You'll probably only find censored/cut versions of it now, as she was heavily underage, and that sort of thing is frowned upon these days.  Anyway, may be worth checking out for inspiration for this tale.

Nice chapter btw.  Not every episode needs to be rolling in sex, much like other stories shouldn't be rolling in action each time.  This one read more 'smoothly' for the most part.  I sense you may be a little uncomfortable writing the more intimate scenes, which can certainly be hard.

Keep up the good work, and nice unfolding of the plot.  I'm still interested to see what this box actually is!

[Burningplain]

Ah thank you for that explantion, I stand by my statement of 18.

[Saint]

Have you ever seen, er, Pretty Angel (I think it was called that, can't remember for sure).  It had a very young Brooke Shields in, if you know her.  In the film she is a young girl growing up in a whorehouse, and they auctioned her off when she was about 12.  You'll probably only find censored/cut versions of it now, as she was heavily underage, and that sort of thing is frowned upon these days.  Anyway, may be worth checking out for inspiration for this tale.

Pretty Baby.  I found a slightly cut version.  It's a good film overall, and it has indeed given me some ideas for things I could do with this.  One thing I'll say is that the ending was a bit sudden and slightly anti-climatic, too.

[Saint]

As I'm 18, I've moved this into AO Alley, and killed the censoring spoiler boxes.  This is now purely for the perverts. >=D

[Chinaren]

This is now purely for the perverts. >=D

~Steps up~

You called?

[Saint]

How did I know you'd respond to that? -_-

[Burningplain]

Vhen vill ze next up date be occuring zir?

[Saint]

Vivin ze veek, I 'ope.  Zo vhy are vee speeaking so veirdly?

[Burningplain]

I honestly don't know. I just felt like it.

[Burningplain]

Hey where's the update?

[Saint]

Upcoming.  I have 16 days to write 47,000 words for nano.  If I succeed, the next 3,000 or so of this will be within.

EDIT:  Also, tiebreaker poll!  You have three votes.  Please vote for two ages, and use the third to choose either 'Two girls' or 'Only one girl'.

[Chinaren]

Yay!  And I quite like these polls where you can vote more than once.  I may have to try it.

[Burningplain]

I'm voting for 2 girls, cos it won't let me vote again. I only got 2.

[Saint]

Looking at the moment like 12 and 18.  This should most certainly be interesting to write.  I'll close voting later tonight, and work on this tomorrow.

[Burningplain]

Off-Topic:

Er... Saint just had a thought. With regards to whether or not you intend to publish this... you might want to check the law. I may be being paranoid but if you intend to get this published it may get classed as child pornography. Not entirely sure... just got a feeling. Sorry to pull this out... it's just a paranoia thing.

[Saint]

This is a Tome exclusive thing, as I want to write for children and teens, and don't really want paedophilia erotica on my record, but I'm pretty sure it's legal as long as, you know, you're not actually raping a 12 year old girl behind the scenes.  Besides, social opinion would pretty much guarantee this doesn't touch any bookstores.

[Burningplain]

Hmmm, can't find anything either way. Still worth keeping in mind. Put a disclaimer in, just to be on the safe side.

[Saint]

So it's been implied that this may be illegal, and that it's offending people by being here.  This has been removed temporarily until this whole thing has been resolved.  Just in case, I'd like to state here that the work is the entire responsibility of myself, and that Tome City, its citizens, and its owner have no responsibility for its contents.

[Saint]

I've decided after the events of tonight that this story isn't worth the hassle of someone else finding it and tarnishing any reputation I may have in the future as an author.  It's being frozen and left out for dead, but fear not, I'm starting a new one,coming to your screens soon.

[Overlord]

So it's been implied that this may be illegal, and that it's offending people by being here.  This has been removed temporarily until this whole thing has been resolved.  Just in case, I'd like to state here that the work is the entire responsibility of myself, and that Tome City, its citizens, and its owner have no responsibility for its contents.

As far as I'm aware, this is not illegal in any major western country at this time.  If it was then certain other sites, and there are plenty of them, would be far ahead of us in terms of being a target. 

As far as warnings go, well it's in the Adult area, and the title alone should be enough to warn anyone about the content.  It abides by all the rule of Tome, not that there are that many to begin with.

I'm quite okay with this being on Tome.